Slips

L.G. Link my ideas between my paragraphs

On the way home from bay of plenty  it was pouring down. It was horrendous! There was lightning and thunder and really bad slips. It took 7 and ½ hours to get back from Papamoa.

When we started driving home for 7 ½ hours Papamoa.It started off as a sunny drive home. Then it got darker and darker until the point that you couldn’t see.Next is was at the point that rain came down then...BOOM! Lightning struck. The boys already started to get annoying.’’Oh, Oh you won!’’

So now there a big storm, I couldn’t get back to sleep. I was to worried that we would crash. A couple of minutes later there was a warning for a big slip on the road. When we reached the big slip it reminded me of a river because of all the water and rocks. I open the window and whimpered, “oh It’s cold!’’

We had a little pit stop in Mouko for you probably know what.(tiliote)We saw the Aquabladz. When we saw the  Aquabladz we left  straight away! The Aquabladz are our worst enemies but sometimes we are frenemies.

We got passed the Aquabladz finally so we got home safely everyone got home safely it was a very fun trip except the way home.If you have To go on a trip make sure you have comfy clothes, A blanket,pillow,food and water.

Nationals plan

L.G. use some good ideas S.O.S punctuation

Dear Mr Winston Peters

I am writing to you to recommend that you choose  a coalition with national.

National will lower the tax prices

It will help with the people that aren't so rich. So the will have more money for food, clean water and warmth. The warmth and clean water will stop them from getting sick. The food will stop them from starving to death.

Cows farts cost money(labour)

Don’t choose a coalition with labour, why because they are going to make farmers pay around thirty dollars when a cow farts. But how will they now when a cow farts will they have the owner stand outside all night and day waiting for a cow to fart.

Lower the house prices(national)

It will be easier for poor people to buy houses. Because they won't have to ask inosite people like us for money.it will also save them time and money.

Please choose to do a coalition with national because it would be critical if you pick labour.