Fidget spinners

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Use at lest 5 persasive words from the list.

S.P.S are you tired of listening to your teacher talk too much? And you're trying to find something to fidget with but you don’t know what ? Well get a fidget spinner. Mr Elder I’m talking to you.

Firstly, Mr Elder it was originally made for people with autism, anxiety and ADHD to keep them calm and focused.But the fidget spinner ended up being a big hit to everyone. The fidget spinner was made in 1990 but it is a big it now in 2017.

Secondly, Mr Elder it’s a stress relieving toy which will keep us calm, we won’t have  much work on our mind ready for the next piece of work. They will make more of us focused and get principal awards and more focused children will be more successful in life.

Finally, Mr Elder this toy is above all the other toys even hasbro gaming. I know people never brought that to school but there board games. I know the fidget spinner is not  necessarily needed here but it’s a stress relieving so come on what's so wrong with that. If people don’t listen the should be the ones that get banned because that's not fair on the good children that are actually good.

So Mr Elder have I convinced you that fidgets are allowed at school? So what are you waiting for go get one come on they don’t bite

Going to the dentist isn't that fun for some people! But having a school canteen you gonna go to the dentist a lot more. I’m going to give you three reasons why we should not have a school shop.

Firstly, we don’t need a school shop. But I know what you're going to say “What if forget our lunch” we'll pack it the night before and wella you won’t forget your lunch.

 Secondly, If we do get a school canteen it will introduce obesity to stratford primary school there will be less and less people running cross country. Every year 400 down to 302 thats a 98 different. Who would be running. Did you know that obesity as reached all around the world with at least 2.8 million people dying each year from obesity.

Thirdly, who's going to buy all the food anyway? Are the shops going to give it to us for free…. News flash the won’t! So what's the point? You could go buy it from the shop down town it's probably cheaper anyway.

 Did you know there is a such thing called 102 colouring. Its called tartrazine it is a cancer causing ingredient. Some foods can cause cancer such as red meat, salt preserved food and half foods. Some of the kids say we can raise money for cancer but some of the food have tartrazine in it.

So I hope you understand why we don’t need a school shop because more obesity, you can get cancer and who’s going to buy the food I’am absolutely sure the shop is going to have disastrous consequence, don't let this happen

Dear Mum and Dad

I just ran off the boat and jumped into the death of the sea. My mates start sinking because of their bags, it's was like a whale in there bag. My heart was pounding. Now everyone  re dropping like dead fish around me. I run down into a trench. One of my mates are running towards me. Out of the hils a bullet once clean now covered in blood that fires at him. I get down on my knees and pray he's gonna be okay. I decided it’s time to fight back. I can't stand to lose anymore friends. Only in one day. I look up to the sky. I’m paralysed for a second then something hits me in the chest I see a bright light. My eyes start to shut very, very slowly. I woke up in the doctor's tent. Even though this is my first letter it might be my last.

Love from Samara